Teen Poetry #7 |
me not her |
poise_and_rationality Junior Member
since 2006-05-06
Posts 46my mind |
me not her I'm not sure if you know or not But I really do love you a lot. You still hold a special place in my heart And you did, right from the start. But when she came along and took your breath away, I was devastated and didn't know what to say. I spend my nights crying, time after time, I spent my days lying, saying I was fine. Little did you know, my heart was crushed inside, And on that day, a little of me died. But with her, you look so in love 'Cause you are an angel from above. I now have to teach my heart to move on, For, you are now forever gone. But about one thing I am unsure: Why it can't be me, and not her. PAR Give me attention |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
ahh im going through that right now!!!!! sooo omg...woah! i love this! u wrote it so well |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
It's very sad, yet shows a lot of maturity on the person in the poems part. I loved reading it, I've been through that, i know how it feels and it's not that easy to teach your heart to move on, but you got to try... Good write on this one, one of my favorites by you i'm sure, probably cause i can relate so well to this poem... Thanks for sharing As always Stargal PS-Your rhythm is a little stiff in parts, I would advize you to read this aloud to yourself and see what you think. @-->--- |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
I loved it.. I can relate. Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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poise_and_rationality Junior Member
since 2006-05-06
Posts 46my mind |
glad you liked it lol x |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
That was awesome! Actually...I kinda needed to read something like that.... Thank you. Rerra L. |
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