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Teen Poetry #7

I've lost my world

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2006-06-04 10:15 PM

You have taken my heart; take my life as well,
I promise on God’s word, won’t deceive you ever,
See how fate has molded my life, never thought it would happen to me,
Can’t bear to realize what happened, how I became separated from you,
Do me some justice, forgive me please, this is all I ask of you,

In my lust of passion, I became lost, forgetting to keep it simple,
Love is only this, that I take care of it, by your feet I leave my soul,
Take away my serenity, and my happiness, and give me all the pains of life,

My words tell my story, don’t think of them as mockery,
Through many tears, my eyes have faded,
Within them colors of delusion have blended in,

Stay close to me, and I won’t make another mistake, won’t do you any harm.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

1 posted 2006-06-04 10:19 PM

This was an amazing piece. Great structure, very sweet message, and i really enjoyed this read!

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-06-06 09:24 PM

I liked it, I liked it more than I could probably ever put into words, because they'd be kind of meaningless...

I loved the second stanza most though, I believe to a certain degree I can relate well to that piece. I enjoyed the whole poem though.

Thanks for sharing once again with everyone, it's very pleasurable to read your poems

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