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Teen Poetry #7

just a short poem

VintageHollywood
New Member

since 2006-05-19

Posts 4
England

0 posted 2006-05-19 09:53 PM

I can't write
And I can't talk
But my minds as busy as Hell
Theres no one there
But when there finally is
Nothing good comes out
So I just sit here
I bottle my thoughts
And send them out to sea
But no one will know my hidden pains
No one but me

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

1 posted 2006-05-19 09:57 PM

Wow.. This was a very intesting first post.. the only thing I suggest is the title.. it fits but then again I feel like it could have had a little more to it if you know what I mean.. This was great.. I love how you wrote this.. keep it up..

WELCOME TO PIP!!!!

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2006-05-19 10:16 PM

welcome to Pip!

*please check your email for a special greeting!

‘I want to swim away
but don’t know how
sometimes it feels
just like I’m falling
in the ocean’
~Blue October

aliway
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 185
With in your eyes

3 posted 2006-05-19 10:21 PM

i like it. it was cool
oh, welcome to pip!!
~

~

*leah

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

4 posted 2006-05-29 04:51 PM

Hey VintageHollywood,

Welcome to pip!

Like Heather said interesting first post. I did enjoy your poem though, it was something very different from anything else i've read, but you know, i say that a lot, lots of people with lots of ideas around here

I know i'm a little late in posting, but all the same, i hope you are enjoying pip. I know I can't wait to see more work from you!

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