Teen Poetry #7 |
life |
greco Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 85buffalo ny |
Life Life is so tough I have not many years but I feel I have lived another life This feeling will never go away My heart feels so sad, so empty, with a big hole, something missing I don’t understand why this pain aches I just want to be free from this world; I want to know what lies beneath This world does not seem right for me Yet I can’t part with the family I love, for they are too dear to me I feel something is not right, I feel that someone is missing from my life I am young, but I feel so old Someone should not rescue me; I feel I may pull them with me I should be left alone Why is this happening to me, is there really a God If so how come he lets the good go and the bad stay? But yet the good get in trouble and learn from there mistakes, and become stronger And the bad get away swift free but yet always stay rotten |
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Why Junior Member
since 2003-09-26
Posts 32Middle of nowhere |
I absolutely love this poem. My life is exactly the same, or it was until i met my gf. Then she was taken from me. Just remember that there is always a little hope. |
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greco Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 85buffalo ny |
hey sorry about your situtation with your girlfriend but thanks for the compliment |
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magic_612 Member
since 2003-07-31
Posts 190NB, Canada |
very good work, very emotional. Thanks for sharing |
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shara Member
since 2002-05-21
Posts 69florida/USA |
my friend, there is a reason for everything, maybe God takes away the good so they don't have to suffer in this hell we call earth, maybe He takes them so that they may act as angels to those that know not what they do, whatever the reason, God has a divine plan for everything and everyone, yes my friend, even you this was really awesome, thanks for the great read, be blessed and keep writing -sha-sha |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
hmmmmm, yes. we can only hope that there is a greater plan at hand. good onnnnnneeeeeeeee. |
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greco Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 85buffalo ny |
hey thank you all this really means a lot to me |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Wow can I relate to this one. Feeling 3 times your age....I've been there, I AM there. Great piece..keep it up *dq **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
I think all of us either have or will feel that way sometime in our lives, Nice work, very emotional and well written ~*~Karen~*~ |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This is a very heart-felt poem, written with lots of emotions within. Keep writing out your feelings. It helps. Hugs to yuu Ethel |
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Ally Stone Junior Member
since 2003-10-20
Posts 48D.C. |
You could definitly open my diary and find something comparable, though less eloquent. Good Job! |
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my_lost_soul New Member
since 2003-10-28
Posts 6 |
ei your poem is like describing my life right now...nwiez..good poem and keep writing=).. |
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