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sins_and_tragedies Junior Member
since 2006-04-26
Posts 41england |
This poem is important to me, because I wrote it to show that people should help other people in need, even if they don't know them, because they might end up in the same situation someday. I saw you on the street surrounded, I didn't know you, But there was a group of kids circling you, Their taunts hit home I could tell from your tears, They were picking on your deepest fears, 'Not my problem' I told myself, And crossed the street, walked on, The sound of the punches and the kicks, Was soon gone, I'd moved out of their range, 'Not my problem'...how strange... I saw you later on, Hunched on the floor, You must have crawled away from those bullies, But not soon enough, you were bleeding now more, You'd obviously collapsed from the strain of getting away, 'Not my problem' I told myself, Not knowing that would be me later that day. I rounded the corner, And there they all were, The bullies I'd seen earlier tormenting her, One of them came over, Asked me why I was there, He was bigger than me, And I was scared, They punched me and kicked me, I started to cry, Then I noticed, A woman walking by, I tried to call her for help, But my mouth was filled with blood, And I felt myself drop, hitting the ground with a thud, 'Not my problem', the woman told herself, And walked away, I wanted to say 'NO!' It might be you someday, But the strength was not in me, To utter a cry, 'It's not my problem', but today I died. is good to face this things with a sense of poise and rationality |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
pretty much all i can say is woah. |
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Lindsay Member
since 2003-03-26
Posts 59South Dakota |
Awesome! Great Write! I don't know much at all, I don't know wrong from right, All I know is that I love you tonight |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Omgosh! This is like the best poem i've read all day, this makes me think a lot on how many times i have said "not my problem", and well, i'm ashamed of myself... Thank you so much for posting this, it is such a good poem, i'm putting this one in my library to remind me of why it IS my problem  @-->--- |
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Tempest Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 247dont eat paint chips!!!! |
Sins_and_tragedies....you are my new best friend! That was one of the most amazing things ive ever read in my entire life. |
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sins_and_tragedies Junior Member
since 2006-04-26
Posts 41england |
wow i wasnt expecting such good responces!!!! well im glad you lot liked them-thanx for all your replies i suspect i'll be on here more of ten if i'm that loved!!!!!! danielle xx is good to face this things with a sense of poise and rationality |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
oh wow. this was amazing. not only did it flow beautifully...but it had such a deep meaning. i really loved this. I ask why, but in my mind, |
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pullingxthextrigger Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 133MA,..USA llx |
im so ashamed of myself  i say that all the time...this poem rox and im going to listen to its moral thxxx keep up the AWESOME and i mean AWESOME wokr ~nora <3 your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx - P!ATD! |
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intention Member
since 2005-11-13
Posts 59New Delhi, INDIA |
hey lovely post .... Love me for who i m |
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Junebug Junior Member
since 2006-04-23
Posts 40earth |
OMG this poem rocks! i should have my sister read it...shes always saying "sucks for you" instead of helping someone who needs it! but anywho your poem is totally awesome!!! |
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sins_and_tragedies Junior Member
since 2006-04-26
Posts 41england |
thamx to everyone who replied i'm gratevel that you liked it.... sat x is good to face this things with a sense of poise and rationality |
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Ace of Crimson Tears Junior Member
since 2006-03-03
Posts 14United States |
holy crap that was a great poem. i could picture everything you talked about. keep up the good work. |
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poise_and_rationality Junior Member
since 2006-05-06
Posts 46my mind |
thanx to everyone who replied i based this poem on people i knew and even me.. house of compusure where is your posture? |
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themute Member
since 2006-05-08
Posts 469Maryland |
its a never ending cycle of being beaten up. |
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Archea Member
since 2006-05-13
Posts 65United States |
good night, that was amazing. i really like how you can tell a story in the form of a poem. alot of people cant do that, and make it as good as this. |
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Sweetpali08 Junior Member
since 2006-05-07
Posts 40 |
Oh wow... This is soo sad and touching. I enjoyed the way you expressed yourself and took things out of you to teach others.. Wonderful write. Keeep them coming. "How are they the VICTIMS if they are the OCCUPIERS?!" |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
thats unbelievable....that captures everything perfectly..wow. thats the best poem i've read today, and probably yesterday too!! thanks for sharing that. ~missy |
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poise_and_rationality Junior Member
since 2006-05-06
Posts 46my mind |
its okay thanx for all your wonderful responses....: |
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forever*wishing Member
since 2006-05-29
Posts 178where my heart is |
amzing amazing amazing. it really made me think. GREAT JOB. ~L |
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stuck_in_a_dreaM New Member
since 2006-06-07
Posts 8 |
u really captured this in a way i wood never have been able 2. i enjoyed it alot |
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