Curse And Swear (The Language of Despair)

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young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2006-04-27 04:07 PM

beat your chest and scream
maybe they will hear
claw out your eyes at night
and run out of breath, pant...pant
bile bleeds out of your words
and repulsion pushes you toward
an inclination to clam up, but
nothing changes.
nothing changes.
except
for
you. the deaf
pronounce words in a way
that makes you laugh inside,
we’re laughing at everyone.
the message is too important for our tongues
my hands will show you the way,
my hands will show you the way.
all because of you.

cherrys_rule
Member

since 2006-03-18

Posts 442

1 posted 2006-04-27 05:16 PM

I really like this one you had alot to say but it came out small. yeah i don't know what i just said so just ignore me

keep up the good work.

cherrys_rule

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-04-27 07:24 PM

Okay, so first off I want to say I love the title of this poem, I think it just fits the whole poem in a way I can’t describe, or even put into words in my own mind.

I’m not really sure what to say, something about this poem captivates me, and it’s almost like an illusion inside of an illusion…
Omgosh! That does not make any sense.

As stupid and regular as this sounds, I loved this poem, it’s something different and unique in it’s own way, and I hope to see more.

I’m also sorry I can’t really tell you why, in meaningful words, I liked this, it’s something between myself and myself

@-->---

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2006-04-29 08:55 AM

thanks for reading

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

4 posted 2006-04-29 03:25 PM

Glad to see your still at. I've said this before and here it is again, you have alot of talent my friend and this is an excellent example of that. I like this:

"nothing changes.
nothing changes.
except
for
you. the deaf"

very captivating piece

Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free
-" Slave of Love" by: Me. (posted in Dark Poetry)

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

5 posted 2006-05-01 04:29 PM

i'm glad that you found it interesting. to be honest, i am bored with poetry. i admire those that can creatively compose it, but i despise my own mediocrity. thank you for the encouragement though.

pullingxthextrigger
Member

since 2006-05-01

Posts 133
MA,..USA llx

6 posted 2006-05-01 08:21 PM

love it and luvv the title
keep up the great work <3

~nora

p.s--theres nothing wrong with ur poems
i luv them! maybe u just need sum more
insperation

your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx

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