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young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2003-11-20 01:56 PM

Looks like i screwed up again
I made your make up run
Deja vu has become my best friend
This happens as often as i speak
Plucking the strings of my heart
Seems easy to the master luthier
Cupid gives all love its start
But i mix my sound mind in too

My mind takes over my heart
Puts out this wild fire
Signals sent to my core
Are confusing and making things hard to understand
I want it this way
I want it that
What if she wants nothing at all?
What if she will never want to stay?

Clear water with a murky bottom
Just like our relationship
No one knows what comes next
Is it on a knife point?
If i push too far one way
Off the edge to be serra*ed
By heartbreaks painful teeth
But loves side is sweetly debated

Just to see you
Just to talk to you
To know that we're alright
To know you're alright
I'd gladly give my life
To hear you say
that your time
With me is precious
To you

now im alone, but not lonely like before

PrincessNets
Member

since 2002-10-30

Posts 103
NewYork, USA

1 posted 2003-11-21 08:23 AM

I think this poem was pretty good. I really liked the line: "Deja vu has become my best friend". I think a lot of people can relate to this. My relationship with my ex was like this. Good job!

-Jeanette-

Deep_Inside
Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 377
i can't stop hiding

2 posted 2003-11-21 12:37 PM

i like this one i also like the line "Deja vu has become my best friend" i have this experience often and it's creepy isn't it?
and with the line after that one "This happens as often as i speak" i think you need sleep hehe, anyway i also like the "Is it on a knife point?" this was a good way to show how fragile it just might be. well good job and keep writing

when you live you begin to die
when you die memories of you life lives in others
when memories of you begin to fade
you truly begin to die

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

3 posted 2003-11-21 01:39 PM

giving life to speak words....just one of many worth while sacrifices for heartbroken people.

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