Teen Poetry #7 |
tell me..... |
curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
I said I was o.k. I guess I lied because I can’t take it anymore And I guess that I’m going to let it all go. So here it goes… You said you wanted me, You said you were going to leave me, You haven’t done any of that so tell me, Am I going to get a waking call today? Because I just want to know why are you being? Why are being like this Just tell me if it’s over, I just want to know the truth, Tell me if were through, So I can move on, Tell me why you’re acting because I know this isn’t you This isn’t you cause I know you that you want to let it all out But you don’t know how to tell me If were going to be or tell me if your going to leave Cause to be honest with you I just want to move on Before it’s too late, Because I know you don’t care no more, And I don’t’ have time for people who do not care about me…. …Like you! Curioustity is a fine gift... |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey, Let me point out a few things… 1) Your poem doesn’t really have much of a rhythm, or maybe I just couldn’t find it? I thought I could have flowed a little bit better, but that’s just me. 2) I also think stanzas would have been nice, just to help the reader keep their place. Other than that this was a nice poem! Loved how you said you didn’t need people like that anymore, cause you really don’t… More power to you! Keep posting~ @-->--- |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
stargal, i'm not the best of poets actually i don';t think i am one at all!i just write down my imagination for you to see..thanx though curiouse |
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