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aliway
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since 2006-03-05
Posts 185
With in your eyes

0 posted 2006-03-26 09:59 PM


I’m sick of waiting for that guy
I speak to every night
every day I come to school
hoping for a better you
but every day I see you
you’re scared showing
our real you

Like you told me be for
you’re another guy
when you’re here at school
stop the act and be yourself
be for you’re to late
when you come to terms
with what I’m trying to say
I’ll have moved on to a better day
so if their truly you’re friends
they’ll understand and not disconnect


[This message has been edited by aliway (03-28-2006 03:30 PM).]

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curiouse
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since 2006-03-21
Posts 277
england
1 posted 2006-03-30 09:02 AM


this poem, it seems, had been fed by reality.
wonderfully expressed though,
curiouse

Curioustity is a fine gift...

stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
2 posted 2006-03-30 04:11 PM


Let me just say this is a great poem!

The spelling errors really throw it off though, the first time I read this I was like, “Wow! What in the world is this about”, after I read it though, I noticed that the spelling is what was wrong.
Like,

“be for you’re to late
when you come to terms “

it should be, “before you’re to late”, just so you know there are a few sentences like the one I pointed out.

I love this poem though! How it shows you need to speak truth, be truth…. It’s just amazing.

Thanks again for sharing your poems

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