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helenadepp
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0 posted 2006-02-06 03:38 PM




I know everyone needs someone
But maybe I just need to be alone
With these disappearing morals
Living in a disappearing world
Who would of known?

I know a lot of bodies
But not a lot of friends
With their haunting smiles
Their haunting words
Can this reality bend?

I know that im a pusher
But I seem to push people away
With my messed up ways
My messed up life
Do I even want you to stay?

I know I hate this world
But maybe others do too
Wishing for an apocalypse
Wishing for a better place
Who will make it true?

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1 posted 2006-02-07 04:57 AM


Welcome to Piptalk Helen

This is a very interesting and enjoyable read; “I know a lot of bodies
But not a lot of friends” is a phrase that I think quite a lot of people can identify with, Napoleon Bonaparte expressed a similar notion during his schooling “Alone in the midst of men”. Whilst It may feel like you are alone, there are always people there even if it is only other lonely souls. Anyway great writing, I’m looking forward to reading more of your work.

Andrew

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2 posted 2006-02-08 12:54 PM


You will....and this poem is a step well taken.

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3 posted 2006-03-07 09:40 PM


the line that Andrew pointed out i like also. Welcome to piptalk!

           Jessica    
            
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

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