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Dear Disappointment
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Dear Disappointment |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world 
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Dear Disappointment, I’ve been expecting you for the last few weeks, You always come ruin anything my heart seeks. I knew you’d been here soon, cause it involved him, I keep going back but as we both know I never win. Would it kill you to give me the slightest chance? Why not just once give me a ball instead of just one dance? Just tell him to stop lying to me, to stop killing my heart, Tell him to stop saying those words that tear my world apart. Tell these tears to stop falling, or my heart to stop breaking, but that’s what you want from me, it’s my love you’re forsaking. Stop replaying every song on the radio to remind me of what I lack, Stop replaying his pictures in my mind of what I can’t have back. Stop giving me hope when you know I’ll end up broken, Stop letting him hold back so many words he’s left unspoken. Stop letting him lie to me, after awhile I don’t know what to believe, Stop assuming I’m stupid because I know this happens…and still won’t leave. So let me inform you, you’ve broken my heart one too many times, Made me write so many shattered words with one too many rhymes. All I’m asking is for you to let my heart heal before you come back again, Let me be ok, before you come back to me on a new mission. I’m sure I’ll be seeing you around here sometime soon. Just let me know ahead of time, so I can prepare my heart for you. Sincerely yours, Me. myspace username-beautiful_tragidy |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Erin~ This is VERY creatively penned~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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broken_smile1469 Member
since 2006-07-02
Posts 104 |
i really liked this poem... i can really relate to it, Great Job! ~Broken_Smile |
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The Shadow in Blue Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 493EL, Michigan |
I liked the the letter format and theme.Very creative and easy to relate to.  |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Wow.. this was wonderful.. one of your best.. I love how you set this up like a letter.. very creative.. very emotional very deep.. I feel like this has a lot behind it and you had such a way with writing down your feelings.. Great job.. this is one of my favorite by you.. Keep it up.. going in my library ~Heather~ Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
reposting bc I forgot to click the button to add to my library.. VERY FORGETFUL lol  ~Heather~ Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
i liked it . the first two lines didnt seem to flow as well ,but the rest of the poem was amazing(well the first part was good to a nice opening.) heres my fav out of all of it. unbelievable and amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Just tell him to stop lying to me, to stop killing my heart, Tell him to stop saying those words that tear my world apart. Tell these tears to stop falling, or my heart to stop breaking, but that’s what you want from me, it’s my love you’re forsaking. Stop replaying every song on the radio to remind me of what I lack, Stop replaying his pictures in my mind of what I can’t have back. Stop giving me hope when you know I’ll end up broken, Stop letting him hold back so many words he’s left unspoken. |
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