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Missing you dad !
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Missing you dad ! |
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Belinda Member
since 2006-01-30
Posts 126UK 
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Heya this is about my dad, he moved from the UK where I live, to New zealand...the other side of the world. I can't believe your leaving me, How could you do this? If you loved me, The way you say you do, Then you'd stay next to me, The way I want you to. I want to hold you tight, and never let you go, How was I, Supposed to know ? Because you promised me, You'd always be here, To sort thing's out, To make them clear. I need you now, But you're going away, You're going there, Forever to stay. Soon enough, You're leaving me, So if this is your desire, I'm glad you walk free. Fank u ! Belinda xXx *mwah* xXx |
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DejaEntendu Member
since 2005-12-06
Posts 82Pennsylvania |
pretty good write. Very truthful, but I would recommend not typing what the poem is about at the beggining. That's usually for other people to think of, and if you tel them directly, it may influence how they feel about the poem, without them deciding for themselves. But this is well-written, and an excellent poem. |
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Belinda Member
since 2006-01-30
Posts 126UK |
thank u !  ! |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This was very well done, and asks those questions we all want the answers to when this happens. I am afraid it is always about them and never about us. Life is ever changing and this is another example of how. Good thing there are phones  Nice writing, and I rather enjoyed knowing what it was about myself."There's nothing worse that being an aging young person!" - Richard Pryor |
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Free_Spirit07 Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 222The middle of my mind! |
WOW ok that was a good write!......... ummm yea! Hay im new here and every time i try and post a poem it says "Submissions have been temporarily disabled while we update our database. Please try again later." And yet you and other people can post! really out of it eh? if anyone can help that would be great, once again nice write! xoxo Free_Spirit07 |
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