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River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

0 posted 2003-11-14 12:02 PM

The sound of weeping rain
it's grasp is ever present
flooding over my endless pain
calling me out of the midst
of lonliness and dispair
into a downpour of joy

I feel the cool water
streaming down
embracing my soul
and i feel strangely renewed
as it quenches my thirst
I feel life again
to all that once was dead
I feel peace again
to all that once was suffering

The mist it washes away this scum
and wretchedness
of the eternal desert
it kisses my dry lips
and makes me whole again

The rain it makes
the old breath new
and alive again
the trees rejoice
as the birds once more make song
and a smile spreads across
my now youthful face
as the rain fills my soul
and i drift into peaceful sleep
for the very first time

sleep. rain. sing.

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

1 posted 2003-11-14 11:25 AM

me like the rain....me too

monkey
Junior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 27

2 posted 2003-11-14 02:15 PM

awesome poem, i like how you use rain to describe things.

duncan idaho
Member

since 2003-11-14

Posts 70
dune

3 posted 2003-11-14 02:29 PM

good use of imagery.

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

4 posted 2003-11-14 08:47 PM

thanx guys...this poem just...slammed me all of a sudden, i almost couldn't keep up with the words when i wrote them. all i was doing was watching a movie. at the very beginning right before the intro, it played the sound of rain and thunder...and bam, just like that, i was like, Waiiit, i gotta pause the movie!!! lol. glad i did, and i'm glad you guys liked it. =).

- River

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

skyshine