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DejaEntendu
Member

since 2005-12-06

Posts 82
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2005-12-06 11:59 AM

hi everyone
this is the first poem i've wrote.. I hope it's not too bad. Any comments/suggestions are welcome.

You may Never Know

They say home is where the heart is,
my heart belongs to you, I'm homesick.

Your face, a sight for sore eyes,
takes me away, I'm awestruck.

Your laugh, sends chills up my spine,
numbing my body, I'm paralyzed.

Your presence, rejuvinates my soul,
revealing my inner-self, I'm authentic.

Your spirit, urges me to strive forward,
traveling where I've never been, I'm fearless.

Your Fragrence, cleanses my pores,
setting my mind at ease, I'm refreshed.

And you may never Know.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2005-12-06 01:30 PM

WELCOME to our poetic world~

Enjoy your stay and by all means share more~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*No matter what I search for ...
let me know when it is LOVE that I find*~ <))><

Email - noles1@totcon.com

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
Member

since 2003-07-16

Posts 248

2 posted 2005-12-06 06:33 PM

Wow...WELCOME to piptalk. This is Amazing.

VERY well written, and i hope you enjoy it here

<3kerR

When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better.
Mae West

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2005-12-06 08:58 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
I very much enjoyed your first post.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Let peace begin with me...

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

4 posted 2005-12-07 07:57 PM

welcome to passions and i really enjoied this post. keep writing im looking forward to more!

LOVE NEEDS TO DIE

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

5 posted 2005-12-07 08:55 PM

DejaEntendu,
I gotta say it is seldom fun to read cliches. But, I liked what you did with them. Very clever. And welcome to Passions. I like your creativity and look forward to more of your writing. Hope you like it here.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

6 posted 2005-12-16 08:59 PM

i like this one. very nicely put together

hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men!
"and we'll all float on ok....." - modest mouse
aim - reklesabandnrckr
groove on sista!

intention
Member

since 2005-11-13

Posts 59
New Delhi, INDIA

7 posted 2005-12-18 05:26 PM

nice one ..good thoughts

shilpii

Love me for who i m

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