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made on middle ground
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made on middle ground |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
She is the quietest of the middle and most would believe the weakest she arises to sit in the driveway and drinkswater from a blue eyed cup. His eyes stare her down even here. She asks herself where her song has went an answer she will achieve by the time night pulls its curtain. Covering up its ugly naked body. There is no regrets as we lie in the room on yellow towels and knock our teeth together. We leave soveniers in every corner of each others body dosed in love from a seperate era. We mix hard liqior in with our koolaid. I am a child but I will not be made a fool. My loved ones are wrapped in blankets like blue and green buritos. I watch the chosen ones as they sleep. I do not demand immediate attention, only that you keep the image of me close in reflective sight. My wizard, my wish giver you grant me partial permission in this world. My bones turn wooden as my chemistry morphs. What do I have to give you, I single simple daisy and you gaze with blue eyes aflame calm as all hell and then you scream over the rush: It must have caught up in the winds. I saw you throw your hands straight up. accused. the blossom has been through many cycles stuck in bike spokes with its ping and pop, a funny summer rythum. Wedged between guitar strings, slipping in finially to the core where it is reignited in the reverbirating echo of the only true thing. Yes wizard she has in fact caught in the wind will you make yourself light like dandilion fluff after her until you've reached the only middle meadow? |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
you should put it together better...but the poem itself was awesome. the simile's and mataphors flourished in this poem...very amazing write...jsut put more structure in it so it is easier to read... <3 karissa I ask why, but in my mind, |
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electricxheart Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184far away from home. |
Your writing style is so unique. Every time I read a piece of your work it instantly draws me in. Love these images. Beautifully created. Keep writing. -Kelly |
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