Teen Poetry #7 |
As good as her |
tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
It’s the words left unsaid that remind me You’re the one that got away. I know that you’ve forgotten what feels like To know that something got in the way. Trying to see past the never ending images, Remembrances of this vigorous game, I consider whether you were ever there, And wonder if love was worth all this pain. It’s the sunsets at night, the walks in the rain, That remind me you’re no longer there. The only person you notice now is her, And you never knew how much I truly cared. Time goes by and I’m tempted to run back But I know that no matter how hard I try, I’ll always miss you, it’s an untreatable scar, But I’ll never be the one to catch your eye. I’m not going to put myself through that again, The pain of seeing what we always were, Cause, deep inside, I know it’s true, To you…I’ll never be as good as her. -Erin AIM-blueyed angel940 |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
I know exactly how you feel. Nice work, as always. ~Jess "The greatest thing you'll ever learn is to love, and be loved in return" -Moulin Rouge |
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I_dont_know_me Junior Member
since 2003-12-08
Posts 48UK, Cymru |
I love it! I havent read your work in a while! i can always relate thanks for a great read x x x |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this is beautiful... it reminds me of my ex and how i could never live up to his previous girl... well written you capture the emotions and essense of this cruel emotion..... Ruth live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever...... |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
O M G this is sooooooooooooo excellent.... I am keeping this... so much I can relate to, even if it is an old scar.... well done |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
makes me sad...but it is a wonderful poem. thanks for the read. <3 karissa I ask why, but in my mind, |
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~*BayBee*~ Member
since 2003-04-09
Posts 65In The Clouds... |
This was a very good piece of work! I can really relate to this! Great Job! |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
And you know what is worse is when he choses you only wanting you to become her lol. I know this. Pain ful. You are believe it or not worth more than some guys heart. -JUju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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StarryEyed3 Member
since 2005-06-26
Posts 58bostonia |
so sad but so perfect. i like your rhyming. keep it up. "and i'll sit and wonder of every love that could have been |
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