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Useless Desires |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
Developing a strange sort of attachment to you And I can't reverse the effects Resisting in every way I know how Reliving your every laugh and smile Every time you look my way it seems Kindling is being lit afire My thoughts linger on you Only you can satisfy my desire Relinquishing my hold on all control To you I shall always belong My heart breaks at the thought You may have found someone else Losing all hope I waste away Only to realize I can't give up Voicing my feelings will be difficult Eventually you may learn the truth Let go of your concept of reality and try mine for a while...then we'll see how long you last. [This message has been edited by teenpoet (09-25-2003 09:38 AM).] |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
Great work! I'm speechless... ~Jess  "Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
there has been a lot of grate poems on subjects like this, but this one i especially like. keep righting |
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BabieDoll Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268BFE |
This was good...I enjoyed the read greatly! Marvelous job! ~J.Lynn  **To fear love is to fear life, and those who fear life are already three parts dead.** |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this is excellent. keep up your writing. you have serious talent. aussie teen |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
ahh the memories. |
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Silent Evincar Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179Here There and Places Between |
Okay, why didn't I ever see this one before?? This one shoots me right in the heart and brings a comforting smile... because sometimes we win. I adore this piece and it is going in my library. Very cool. NJS |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This is a really good poem. I enjoyed reading it. There were lots of feeling in it.  Hugs  Ethel |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
Thank you thank you all. But it may seem like a nicepoem but i don't much care for it. My opinion is often jaundiced though, so we'll just let that go. And I'm so HAPPY to be back it's been so long!!! I only know myself...and even that I don't know well. |
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xaos Junior Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 35 |
It's strange isn't it? Negative thing always inspire the most I find, or maybe thats just me. Nice work...a theme that doesn't end with the passing of teen years either! |
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lilibeelee Member
since 2001-07-12
Posts 143 |
Uh wow. Very good! |
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muchos Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 102 |
i thought this piece was good, but i wouldnt get an orgasm over it like some people. but i did enjoy it. good work. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Very well written! Your poem flowed well which is always nice and i find easier to read. Good job and keep up the great work! Standing on the edge of the world |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
i really enjoyed reading this. good write ~sam~ |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
No one said you had to have an orgasm...Jeesh, that's kinda weird. And thank you everyone else. When you twist around to see the past you're missing your chance to glimpse the future. |
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