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fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

0 posted 2005-03-22 02:49 AM

you're the only one
that could ever make me
really cry
tears that meant something
that i didn't care about shedding
you were the only one
you were the only one
god i miss you sometimes
but i know it's better
in the end...
in.the.end.in.the.end.in.the.end!
god i want you to be in the end...

-bergundy-

At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2005-03-22 09:10 AM

I like the last line.
and I know what you mean with this.

electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

2 posted 2005-03-22 04:48 PM

I agree, the last line really adds a
whole lot of meaning to the rest of
the poem. I really enjoyed this, it
hits very close to home for me right
now.

Keep writing!

-Kelly

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

3 posted 2005-03-27 12:41 PM

i feel dumb replying to my own stuff but that's okay...i dunno if i like this poem or not. it is just a time of desperation and the words came out. ah well

bergundy

At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio

Mick Hawkes
Member

since 2000-10-26

Posts 90
Tees-side , England

4 posted 2005-03-27 07:34 AM

I find it good to let things flow out unchecked then a little time later go back & read.. you can learn so much about yourself..

Never take life too seriously - None of us gets out alive!

tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

5 posted 2005-03-27 10:07 AM

loved the last line. I was wondering how you would end it and that line made it amazing. I hope you don't mind if i keep this.

AIM-blueyed angel940
She's a question without answers...

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

6 posted 2005-03-27 03:08 PM

thanks for all of the replies, yeah i wasn't sure how i was gonna end this either but that seems to be how i truly felt...crappy about that relationship ending. it stemmed after my boyfriend of two years told me that i never really knew him, and i didn't believe him but now he's being a jerk so i guess maybe he's being honest. oh well...i don't mind if you keep it tapper =) lol thanks again

bergundy

At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio

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