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Teen Poetry #7

Backslapped Into Oblivion

Stinky Twinkie
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 204
Dinwiddie

0 posted 2005-02-23 04:13 PM

...And there he was.
Backslapped into oblivion.
Tiny pieces, I counted a million.
But hey, at least it wasnt a billion.

-Stinky Twinkie can count.-

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2005-02-23 04:41 PM

I like that.
there seems to be a sense of sarcasm to your writing. I like that a lot.

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2005-02-27 12:03 PM

You can count!

lol...the ending made me crack up.

Seriously, I like this. Good write! And you really should change your critique message because your poems aren't bad!!!

~Alli~

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