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xtel Junior Member
since 2003-11-02
Posts 16 |
I wrote this poem when my actual boyfriend told me that he loves me and asked me out. In fact, it’s now 3 weeks that we are together and I’m still wondering if he really loves me… if he loves me for who I am inside... not just because he thinks that i'm a pretty girl. ~~~~~~~~~~ Tell me, How will I know that you are sincere? That you won’t break my heart like all the other boys? Little by little I have built a wall around me. And until I met you I can say that the wall worked out fine. But then, you came. This wall, which took so long to built; You destroyed it only by talking to me. Now that I have start falling, Tell me, Will you catch my fall? xte| |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
good onnnnnnneeeeeeeeeeeee |
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wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa |
I really like this one alot, boys are so frustrating sometimes. " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
hmm...it was alright, there were some grammar errors and such, the imagery wasnt incredible either. if you are going to write in free verse, add some killer imagery, make it stand apart. this is definately not bad for first poems though, keep writing and posting, id like to see more!! -alex now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
I really liked this one, I agree with some of young_blood's comments but this is a good start ~*~Karen~*~ |
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