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Impious Tears and Lackadaisical Air (Just Breathe Man, Breathe)
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Impious Tears and Lackadaisical Air (Just Breathe Man, Breathe) |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN 
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Impious Tears and Lackadaisical Air (Just Breathe Man, Breathe) Midnight cries again… Underneath the wings of a silent moon a woman glides along dance floors of pavement. Her clothing consists of recusant faith, the type of ideas that frame a pride in life. She pants from the weight of beauty, all of her silver and gold has taken its toll. She bends low as if constantly bowing to some invisible prince that wanders the streets. Our woman of soon-sorrow moves her Dream Catcher from her neck to her head, a slight halo of superstition surrounds her now, but she loves the statement it makes. Her hands move in to swish her skirt, a motion so popular for the time of year. Underneath it all, a decayed heart lies twitching and teasing with signs of life. She knows the temporal matters as if life is never to pass or take a side street, but that smile of hers starts to run as the paint slides from view into the night. Her feet continually carry her to the folly that abounds when the sun rests. If she only knew that folly was speeding to her, determined for collision and the end of that dirge. Stars close their eyes as the bell in the church tolls. Amour Propre has drawn yet another to its chest for one last squeeze. Midnight cries again… |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
now this was quite impressive. a very worthy read! Well done.  ~Express Yourself~ |
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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
very well done i do agree. such imagery and visulization. a lovelt poem indeed. robin oh btw i added you to my xanga list. i'm ThePreciousOne21 :0) hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and matt! |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thank you both for commenting. robin, i wondered who had subscribed. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
that would be me dear. don't worry i won't hit on ya lol hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and matt! |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
::great spill, man...this transports your reader...much enjoyed the metaphors... great stuff:: **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
hmm, what to say when your speechless? I know I enjoyed it, and I know it was a brilliant piece. Smile |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
you flatter me, thank you. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Alex...just woah!  Amazing write!  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thanks alli. |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
I suppose it was rather rude of me to not post any replies to your previous works, good as they were. I simply find it hard to find flaws in and sometimes understand work with so much more depth and class than is found within my own. This is the first one that truly got through to me and planted a seed which blossomed further into understanding. Glad to finally find a poem from you I can connect with! May there be many more to follow, because you are one of the best I've ever red from. With Sincerity, Rich [center]"I'm burning in the heavens, |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thanks a lot rich. while mine may have more depth, your form is much stronger than mine. thank you for your perseverance in reading my work. |
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