Teen Poetry #7 |
blue coat |
Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
When I move I bruise immediately. Patches of blue and purple. In this white chair where they sit you, your hands bleed as they hang by your sides. They laugh while the numbers black my eyes. Damn you and your royal blue coat, soft and thick. You've been wearing it everyday for the past week. Where you showcase your tears, and use them to paint water color images. Self portraits mostly. Hide the antidote in your inside pocket. The cure is in a green tablet, the substance of which you sucked from her eyes. Which blink yellow now. And hands which bleed and shake. We are not well. I put on my coat and walk in the rain. Through your water colored landscape. But when it comes down it, I can barely breathe anymore. Damn you and your twisting smile, which pulls always from the right corner before it proceeds. If you were to scream to the sky would it change the fact that the light is blinding. and my eyes are watering, every color drips from their corners. But when I really think about it, I can feel it, and I'm barely breathing. |
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electricxheart Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184far away from home. |
oh my gosh. this drips with imagery, i absolutely love it. especially the ending paragraph. how amazing. -kelly i could be an accident, but i'm still trying. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
The imagery in all your work is wonderful, I always love the way you paint your pictures. Very good piece, I love the feeling I get when I read it. I especially loved the last stanza! Thanks for sharing. But Im comforted |
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LegalSecret69 Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 69Virginia |
This was excellent...I could see so much in this |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
i agree with everyone. the imagery was refreshing. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
awesome write lexy! your poems blow me away.... ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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earthdust Member
since 2003-10-28
Posts 53predestined and foreknown |
wow this is very creative! im sure i cant understand it as the masterpiece it is, but it was a captivating read. " Understanding is more valuable than diamonds. If you can understand me, Then you are a very rich person. " |
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