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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land 
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my steps stuttered with the cold, just like your mouth used to typewrite: "best friends in the whole wide world" sat seriously on the granite wall. we met again in a park, you, still serious, leaves in your mouth and motorbiked friends groping sexual jokes. The swings now blackened by helmets and thrown cigarettes. Oh, we talked. My eyes are blue, and yours are getting browner. |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wonderful writing Claire, I really adore your style of writing, keep up the good work.  Andrew |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
"we met again in a park, you, still serious, leaves in your mouth and motorbiked friends groping sexual jokes. The swings now blackened by helmets and thrown cigarettes. Oh, we talked. My eyes are blue, and yours are getting browner." Loved this part...you have a very intriguing way of writing... Keep Posting Claire! ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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electricxheart Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184far away from home. |
i loved this. i had to read it over a couple more times because i liked it so much. very unique writing style, i think that's awesome. keep writing. -kelly i could be an accident, but i'm still trying. |
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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land |
thank you all for heartwarming crits... |
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