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thinktwice
Member

since 2003-12-23

Posts 125
United States

0 posted 2004-10-21 01:28 AM

Time filed away this tragedy
One slip from the tongue and I was done
it's so cold a fact, so bold a move
but you're not even here to listen

Metal and wine overflow my veins
I'm distilled in pleasure and diluted in stains
Ten times my actions equals a little less than nothing
So what's the point of trying anyway

Hearts and strings constatnly bending
In the frightened mess they spell out agony
and without a second thought they creep over me
This time they've overcome my senses

Thrilling novels left under the stairs
New endings hiding in phsycho-knit layers
Running out of time, running out of wine
"Forgotten!" is my shreaking cry

Dilusion leaves my eyes as pillows
Information lost due to misguided frequency
The knob keeps turning, my mind keeps burning
Time has left for the throat that still swallows

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

1 posted 2004-10-21 04:07 PM

Adam,

this is brilliant, you have a fine writing style.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2004-10-21 06:33 PM

I agree, Adam I always enjoy your poems and this is no exception. Beautiful...me saving.

~Alli~

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WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2004-10-22 12:54 PM

The fist stanza really drew me in, I love the over-all feel of this poem. Great imagery and emotion.
Thanks for sharing.
This is going in my library.

WinterWren-
Counting stars wishing I was ok,
Crashing down was my biggest mistake.

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

4 posted 2004-10-22 01:48 AM

I have to agree that your writing style is very original and quite refreshing. I really enjoyed your poem and the content.

thinktwice
Member

since 2003-12-23

Posts 125
United States

5 posted 2004-10-23 02:30 AM

thanks for the replies. i'm still trying to figure out where my stuff comes from. it happens in a five minutes of inspiration and i'm done. it's almost like i pass out and wake up to something written in front of me. don't ask...i'm weird i know.

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