Teen Poetry #7 |
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your lies are so beautiful. |
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electricxheart Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184far away from home. |
my tears mean nothing, of course. just pretty stars rolling across a mountain of puffy eyes and swollen lips. [i’m empty now and the highway’s calling me back home]. it was never my intention to break my heart strings apart; poisoned fingertips roll across the small of my back and the moment is the kind of silence that makes you want to roll your eyes. [i guess we’re all too good for this]. and please never again should you believe in your dreams and please never again fall in love with blue eyes- and orange skies; broken is what we live for. picking up the pieces of what we have lost; smile and nod your head. [feeling numb in the rippings of your heart and the puddles of rain on your kitchen floor]. your lies are so beautiful, repeat them one more time so my eyes can realize exactly what they’re missing. i could be an accident, but i'm still trying. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
I can't believe this hasn't gotten replies yet. I love the picture this paints, and the emotions that come across. Very beautiful poem, well written. Thanks for sharing, this is going in my library. WinterWren- |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
it was never my intention to break my heart strings apart; poisoned fingertips roll across the small of my back and the moment is the kind of silence that makes you want to roll your eyes. this entire poem was amazing and beautifully written..you should get more comments on this and i shall see to it. amazing. |
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*Alli4000*![]()
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Thank you exhale for bumping this back up again. ![]() electricxheart, your poems are always so beautiful, and if I could pick a favorite part out of this one, I would...but I just loved it all. You are a very talented poet. This is going into my library for sure. ![]() ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey, this was really cool, i've always wished i could write this style of poetry. i haven't been at PIP in awhile cuz for a bit it was just getting boring to me, but i started reading a lot today and your poem was one of many that caught my eye. it's really an awesome piece, thanks. bergundy "Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man) |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
Wow |
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moonguardian2004 Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 64MA, USA |
Wow, that was an amazing poem. You created wonderful images. I was almost sheading a tear while reading it. Very emotional and well written. That was beautifully written. I hope to read more of your work! ~*To be a star, you must shine your own light, follow your own path and don't worry about the darkness for that is when stars shine oh so bright !~ |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
oh god. you are my new favorite writer in here. wow...I love your style of writing. |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Whoa! *blinks* I guess I'm not the only one who feels that way. I loved this one... though the writing style was different. Not one I'm used to, so I can't really critiqe very much. Can't improve what I'm not experienced in. Just wanted to say that I connected with the message of this one completely. -Rich Winamp is Playing: "23" Jimmy Eat World Futures is knowing where I've been ~Rich~ |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Wonderful writing ![]() Andrew |
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punkrockerrobin![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
[feeling numb in the rippings of your heart and the puddles of rain on your kitchen floor]. i really loved that part. what a great poem. thanks for sharing. robin hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and matt! |
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