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Teen Poetry #7

On with my life

Sweetest Sorrow X
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since 2004-01-19

Posts 146
From a cradle to a casket

0 posted 2004-09-16 06:43 PM

I'm worried I'll never see the stars because the city lights...

Engulf.

I want to lay on the top of our apartment complex in downtown nowhere and stare up at black.

City lights make it midafternoon at midnight.

I want to be up so high that we are riding on a cloud of neon.

I want to see the moon as dim, and the stars as dull.

Because the city lights aren't worried about my eyes being fond of gazing.

I believe that lovers should be tied together and thrown into the ocean in the worst of weather and left there to drownin their innocence

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2004-09-17 09:50 PM

I like this poem, it's different from your usual style of writing.

And believe it or not, I live in the country with tree nurseries all around, etc. People want to start building house complexes around our houses, which would be like your poem, with all the city lights, etc.
Ok, now I'm just rambling, so let me just leave it at I like your poem very much..lol..

~Alli~

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electricxheart
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since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

2 posted 2004-10-09 07:15 PM

this paints such a pretty picture.
i'm quite fond of city lights myself.

i really liked this, keep writing.

-kelly

i could be an accident, but i'm still trying.

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