My Tears, [Comment, Then Stay Hush], Edited

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Teen Poetry #7

My Tears, [Comment, Then Stay Hush], Edited

Rommance_Touch
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since 2004-05-07

Posts 97

0 posted 2004-09-11 04:05 PM

everyday there is a sun
everyday there is a moon
but there isnt rain everyday, there are my tears
as im just walking in a wide way, with no way
while the sun is striking my face drying my tears
i cant stop walking, as there is someone forcing me
the sun drawing me to the way of strongers
where is no mercy, where is no gulity, where is no feelings
when u die as human, live as a bone
the place where you are so wild
the feelings are dying
the smile is fang
when you became a rock of hard feelings
ice tears are drying on your face, as sculpture
the power of live in the jungle, where the ppl are animals
when someone can hurt, hate, ..... with no sense of human nature
even the heart of lovers got died as the sun lights are strength
somene came beside me, force me to fight the evil inside me
as the good fight the evil, as the sea races the winds
someone so strong so weak so smart so kind
the moon is going to appea whispeing me on the face of the sea
reflect the lights of the tears were falling on my face
i have just turned to the good face, with romantic feelings
able to fight the hard heart the sun left inside me
as my lover is going to be close to me
melt the ice on my face, reek the tears to drop the rain i was dreaming
the rain of lover drops, when no one can resist
deeply drop on our hearts break the hard rock inside
you will not turn my hard again, to a rock feelings
i will relase the tears, i will release the names, i will tell you my feelings
no one can stop me, no distance, or places
as my heart touches yours, and affect you under the name of dreaming
you wont leave me, as my lips moving spelling your names, after the words "I Love ... "
I LOVE YOU

[This message has been edited by Rommance_Touch (09-12-2004 03:45 PM).]

davidmerriman
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since 2003-04-30

Posts 123
Dallas, TX

1 posted 2004-09-11 04:14 PM

please fix blatant grammatical errors before posting

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2004-09-11 07:45 PM

Woah...ok...i'm just totally confused...

There was so many spelling errors in here, plus the format was kinda weird with the lines being so long.

I'm sorry, I'm sure that other people will love this poem, but it just didn't appeal to me.

~Alli~

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