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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent 
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please leave comments good or bad i need anyone's advice! I can only see my VCR flickering on the other side of the room 12:00 12:00 12:00 it reminds me of you Gah, that light got on your every last nerve! until one day you finally fixed it but now you are gone, and the light is blinking again, I dont want it fixed, that was your job. I don't want spaghetti O's for breakfast, and no more swimming by the moon light. I had so many things to tell you, so many things to say, so many questions to ask, one question, I really need answered is... Why? |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Welcome!  Wow...I loved this... I thought it was fantastic! Please check your email for a special greeting! |
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dodge_chick2003 Member
since 2004-01-18
Posts 136California |
This poem was great. Keep up the good work |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow, this poem was...fantastic... I could really feel your pain  If you ever want to talk, my e-mail is: alg20@juno.com and my aol s/n is: Alli4000 Also, welcome to Passions!  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
I loved this, it made me think some about your point and it painted a picture, something I think that the best poetry can do. Awesome job, keep it up! Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I agree with tapper. It was very awesome, and it did paint a picture. Only some of the best can do that. I really feel the poem, and i can definetely relate. If you ever wanna talk about anything...my email is Kissa_bear04@hotmail.com Oh, and by the way, welcome to passions. Karissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
thank you so much everyone for all of your comments! they really mean alot to me! aol- tearsoflove13762 |
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intention Member
since 2005-11-13
Posts 59New Delhi, INDIA |
do i have to saw awesome again i m mad about ut posts... Love me for who i m |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
wow! yea i wish i had a lot of why questions asked. i really liked this one! hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men! |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
thanks intention and robin!!! |
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Sexy Member
since 2005-11-25
Posts 53 |
i like it thanks for the advise..... |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
great begining. but the last verse is rather weak. regardless, great first post. we all look forward to reading more from you. -majnu |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
thanks manju |
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teedles New Member
since 2005-12-28
Posts 7VA, USA |
I like this one!! Keep writing! Good Job! |
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xox.ice.cream.lover.xox Junior Member
since 2006-01-07
Posts 20Canada |
wow that's so meaningful... |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
thanks teedles and ice cream how did you break my heart when it wasn't whole to start? |
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