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Lindsay Member
since 2003-03-26
Posts 59South Dakota |
Sitting here alone in the dark Wondering if you still remember me The night we met at the dance replaying in my head I remember the first time I saw you You walked up with a beer in one hand and a cigarette in the other We ended up dancing the night away I can still remember the taste of your kiss Your gentle touch, the way your body felt against mine I never did hear from you again |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was a good poem. I liked it a lot. The ending was kinda sad tho. All i can think of is this though: cuz he was drunk! lol Sorry though, it sucks to meet some one you fancy and then not see them again. Then again- he was drinking and smoking- meh! Keep posting and writing.  I left my wallet in El Segundo... |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
moments like these are just meant to be nice memories...who knows? Maybe you will see him again, and maybe, he thinks of you too.  I liked this very much, cause I can relate. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Maybe you didnt hear from him again, because he was drunk, and doest remember?? ???  ??? ~lol~But the way you put it, he should remember something like that. Maybe he does remember, and just lost ur number?? ~lol~ I dunno. He sounds like a Sumokin' kinda guy though!  (sorry, I couldn't resist, and i know, it was korny...) But i do wish you luck.. "who knows maybe prince charming will show up someday, somewhere unexpected???" I liked the poem though.... It was very original, and i get more into poems that dont rhyme. I like it much better.... Kissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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