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Teen Poetry #7

16 Lines...No title.

thinktwice
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since 2003-12-23

Posts 125
United States

0 posted 2004-07-27 03:50 AM

The shallow means
in the endless deep
Close in on me
They follow me

The defiant creeds
Only half asleep
They baffle me
They puzzle me

The moment's need
On my insides it feeds
It troubles me
Oh how it trouble me

The mirror's teeth
In they scream
They're watching me
They're watching me

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2004-07-27 07:30 AM

I liked this one. Pretty simply put, but very nicely said.

You did well with this poem. Keep posting

I left my wallet in El Segundo...
And I gotta get it
I got got to get it!

thinktwice
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since 2003-12-23

Posts 125
United States

2 posted 2004-07-28 11:10 PM

why in the name of all the is sacred and holy did the word % " get edited out of my poem???????????

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

3 posted 2004-07-30 01:05 AM

I dunno, cuz i dont know what the word is, seeing how they edited it out....They do that to me sumtimes too. Very nice write. Like ^^^ said b4. Simple, but nicely written.

Kissa

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*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

4 posted 2004-12-26 03:58 PM

I like this Adam....KEEP POSTING!

~Alli~

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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

5 posted 2005-01-12 10:29 PM

WOAH...
I love that...

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