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Teen Poetry #7

burst forth into nothing

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2004-07-14 11:03 PM

i scatter dirt across the picture frames
and watch as they fade away into the past,
they lie face down and i hope they suffocate
but i know that the memories always last.
letting leaves drop to to the ground
slows any motion (emotion) of the moment,
i await the date of departure
hoping that crystal lies live on.
i dream of you only when i cry
and i cry from nightmares,
so stay with me a while longer
but please and it before i do.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2004-07-15 11:24 PM

did you mean end, instead of and.
in the last line...?
this was short and sad.
I liked it though.
the idea of pictures suffocating.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2004-07-16 09:14 AM

yes it was supposed to be end
thanks lexy

drummerboy678
Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 134

3 posted 2004-07-17 12:07 PM

Hey man,
Another great one. Like Lexy said, I love the 'suffocating pictures' by turning them upsidedown... thats amazing.

Nicely done again

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

4 posted 2004-07-19 11:44 AM

thanks drummerboy, i've had a killer writers block recently. i'll be putting some more stuff up though

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