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BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

0 posted 2004-07-05 08:38 AM

Happiness lays half way
between right and wrong
But I seem to always miss
the entrance
My battle scars shall prove
it to be true

I'm unsuccessful in this
game of love
War is the only thing I
seem to be fighting

I'm one that is hard to
satisfy
And few are up to take
the challenge

Loneliness remains far
longer when you're around
But the bruises still sting across
my heart when you're gone

Choking back tears is all I have
left to do

Happiness is something I
will never truly feel*

There is not ONE person in this world that you cannot live without.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2004-07-11 09:32 PM

I'm one that is hard to
satisfy
And few are up to take
the challenge

amen to that.
I really know what you mean hon.
I love reading your stuff.
take care

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

2 posted 2004-07-12 03:32 AM

hey,
this is really awesome..it's kind of like you're in my head right now. i think pretty much all teenagers sometimes feel this way (at least i friggin hope) awesome write, truly. thanks for sharing. i think i'm addin this to my lib.

bergundy

"Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man)

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

3 posted 2004-12-26 11:43 PM

Great write....Post soon!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

4 posted 2004-12-27 09:46 PM

oo, I really like this one. The fist stanza really drew me in. I especially liked these lines,
"But I seem to always miss
the entrance
My battle scars shall prove
it to be true"
Great work, thanks for sharing.

But Im comforted
by the fact that I can hurt inside
all I want to
without anyone ever knowing
~WinterWren~

Jezzika
Member

since 2005-01-05

Posts 154
work

5 posted 2005-01-07 06:48 PM

"Choking back tears is all I have
left to do

Happiness is something I
will never truly feel*"

WOW! Go get the tissues... I loved this poem.

Jezzika

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

6 posted 2005-01-10 11:05 AM

Jenn, I liked this alot, my favorite part was the last couple of lines. Well done.

"Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether

"I shut my eyes and hold my cries to myself"~ Taproot

John B
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 68
Texas, USA

7 posted 2005-01-10 02:42 PM

'But the bruises still sting across my heart when you are gone.'

That's a real good line. I feel like cursing at the stars. Love is not always a broken heart or a mended one.

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

8 posted 2005-01-10 08:40 PM

"I'm unsuccessful in this
game of love
War is the only thing I
seem to be fighting"

wow it seems as if everyone loved all diff. parts of this poem. thanks for sharing.
laura

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