Teen Poetry #7 |
I'm Trapped |
tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
Well guys, this is out of my normal style.I just wrote how I felt and then made it into a poem, I don't really even know much about this style of poem. Please help me become better, no matter how awful this one is. It's mixed prolly cause I'm so upset. I miss my bf like crazy and it hurts right now so it might not make total sense to you all, sorry. I’m thrown in a spiral oflonging and lust For what I had before. Something I had that I didn’t acknowlege; didn’t realize was there. I miss him with a passion Leaving me so helpless. I miss his promises The unexplainable love he gave, I long for the undesirable; I long for the tears I cried for him That weren’t filled with pain. I miss his comfort, The pillow in my night. I long for his understanding. Among millions of people, The only one, The single one who posses this power, Of understanding my thoughts, Desires, Loves, And pains. I’m in a lost vortex of love and pain, Something that contradicts the other. Though love contains pain It’s full of joy when used right. Now I’m in the middle, Trying to find a way out. I miss your everything. Suppressed by your love, yet striving to get out To take away this longing. I’m trapped in your love. Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't. |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
bloody hell! this is cool, exactly how i'm feeling right now. why do you want our help to make the emotion poems better? my philosphy is just post it...even if everyone hates it, all that matters is YOU like it. good luck with your situation, dont try to change your poetry for other people. be happy bergundy "Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man) |
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