Im another weird Teenager.!!

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sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11

Posts 418
Earth

0 posted 2004-06-02 11:53 PM

I feel like im flying with  my oxygen,
i dont know what comes next or where to go,,
Nothing matters but for me to find my way.

I dont know who i am ,
i dont know why i am,

I only know i have a destiny i can feel behind,
I can say that i love  the behind,

But always hate whats infront,because whats infront is what i dont know ,,

I love the behind because i know what i have done,
i know that i have  fixed.

BUT what about whats coming next?
Is'nt there a bird in my heart trying to fly free?

I wish  i can read my future as much as i can read my name,
i wish i can read myself as much as i can read what i have done.

i wish i have fixed what happend so i wont be going through this ever single day of my life

Is there a solution for that case?
Or is it im just a Stupid Teenager trying to ffind what is cute in life rather than finding what real in life,

Im wrong,
And alwayz will be because i have faild and i have made the stupidest mistakes ever,

But give me a chance to apologize and say,

         I LOVE YOU AGAIN..

I hate the world because it does'nt have a taste, i HATE the world because it does'nt have a color.!!
Admit that im right,,!

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2004-06-30 08:10 PM

ok...I don't really know what to say about this poem...I enjoyed it even though it was not your best work.
anyway, I decided to bump this back to the top of the list to see what other people think.

~Alli~

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

2 posted 2004-07-01 03:07 AM

hey,
i'm not sure if i understood how you meant this piece either, but i got some nice things out of it on my own. basically you make it really relatable because you try to explain how all teenagers feel, which i mean this seems to be the notorious time for us to all feel and change and all that emotional stuff. i think i like the second part i got from it though, which is you asking someone for forgiveness? i feel the same way right now about something that i have too much pride to ask, so i guess i kind of understand. thanks for sharing.

-bergundy

"Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man)

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