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Broken heart!!
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Broken heart!! |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
From all the years that passed, i just cant imagine Us being apart, I used to think you will never leave me and never fall inlove with a different one, but i was wrong,, you left me empty hearted, empty with nothing but pain , I used to think you were always going to be here for me , and take care of me ,but i was wrong, i always thought you would be the one who will lovee the world because of me and put me in your eyes, Like you alwayz said,, i hated the world when you just left, i hated myself for being with you ,i hate myself because i met you, and gave you the chance to love me.,,, I NOW deny every guy for you ,, for you i deny the world, BUt sometimes i wonder, DO you miss me?, WHY DId you leave? Why are you keeping me waiting for life? I dont understand ,,,how was i stupid enough to love you,,? but hey i do love you,,what should i do? I will remain in this love i recall death,For the smile that changed every sec of my life,Thats why .....,,,, I LOVE YOU SO MUCH!!!!! ALWAYZ AND FOREVER I hate the world because it does'nt have a taste, i HATE the world because it does'nt have a color.!! you cant change my mind.,.. [This message has been edited by sweet_cute_palestinian04 (05-29-2004 12:34 AM).] |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
Hey gurl...I liked this one. I really understood your point. "I will remain in pain until the day comes and i freeze to death ,im dying so slowly without a smile from your face....but if it was for me i say ,," This part I had to read over to make sure I got the wording right, maybe if it was something like I will remain in pain, until the day comes that I freeze to death, I'm dying so slowly.......... withough a trace of a smile from your face....but if it was for me I'd say.. I don't know, I still enjoyed it, good job, I really liked it! Keep it up! "If ever you think of me out of the blue, just remember it's all the kisses I've blown in the air finally catching up with you!" |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
yea your right sis,,lol,,,,but i was trying to put it al in one,,thanks si ,,im going to take ur advice thanks..loveszz peace I hate the world because it does'nt have a taste, i HATE the world because it does'nt have a color.!! |
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Rommance_Touch Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 97 |
it is so wonderfull one. it made me tearing its like a LOST LOVE ~~~Rommance_Love~~~ ~~Not_Ended~~ |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
heh...all I can say is I feel your pain right now sweet heart and I'm sorry. ~Live and Laugh~ The memories are worth the pain when the happiness is outweighs the sorrow |
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zenny Member
since 2002-11-24
Posts 371Belgium |
I remember just too well feeling like that myself... Though, after a pretty short while I just realised: The time spend together, the feeling just to be loved and be missed, was worth the pain afterwards... Life went on, so did I, but i still think back at my ex, being gratefull to have met him and have loved him and hoping/knowing both of us will gain happiness again. Now i'm with another guy, and allthough i always thought i'd be together with my ex, i now am happy with this one. Damn, this became longer then intended  |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
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