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Rommance_Touch Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 97 |
I Need You I need you You’re my dream You’re my future You’re my love I need you Round your hand around my body Give me the warm Give me the love Make my heart pump I need you I need your love don’t go away I need your romantic no far away I need you If you like this, rate those too plz....say its bad poem, or nice or whatever in a trustable words...just to guide me to the better... |
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sparrow139 Junior Member
since 2004-05-13
Posts 18UK |
The emotions behind this poem are obviously very strong. I can tell you love someone very much  |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
I appreciate your asking for assistance. I feel a bit odd commenting in the teen section since I'm an old man but wanted to perhaps guide you to some websites that may be of service. Yes, the emotion overflows here but should be contained a bit. Poetry, I believe, is more effective if the reader has to work (just a little) for the meaning. Anyhoooo.....here are some websites; http://www.onlinepoetryclassroom.org/index.cfm Don't be intimidated by this one. Shakespeare is a very good place to start a poetic education. His vaunted sonnets are explained in detail in understandable language, line by line; http://www.shakespeares-sonnets.com/icomm.htm This was a project instituted by former U.S. Poet Laureate Billy Collins. It is aimed at High Schoolers; http://www.loc.gov/poetry/180/p180-list.html Dana Gioia (pronounced joy-ya) uses everyday language in his work. Go mid-page and to the Univ. of So.Cal Santa Barbara site and watch his presentation there. http://www.danagioia.net/index.html For that matter Billy Collins is total fun....look him up here; http://www.poets.org/index.cfm The last sight has an audio section. It helps to hear them read by their authors. Good luck. |
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