Teen Poetry #7 |
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People think love online is right! |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
People think love online is right. People think love on phone is right. People think love is anywhere you meet. i dont agree i dont think its real, I cant ever trust love online, I cant ever be inlove online, how can i know totrust you? how can i believe you can hold me and take care of me ? how can i know if you truly need me? how can i know you will not leave me? how can i look into your eyes and see the love going on? how can i see you real ? I DONT agree with love on machines, there nothing but a lie. YOU SAY we will meet,but are you crazy? i dont know you and you dont know me, all we both know is our little names.. We are acting like little kids ,dreaming of love that never really exists.. DONT you get it? IM NOT IN LOVE WITH YOU, because your not real.. so lets stop dreaming and find real people. |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
I HOPE you like it all..i wrote it right now ,lolol..like i said on top your honesty never hurts soo please tell me anything you truly think... lovezz peaceee Jana,, |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
I think love is relative to everyone's own opinion. Online relationships work for some people, and don't work for others. It really depends on what kind of person you are, and how well you know the other. You're right, in the sense that love has lost some of its "lustre" in a way because of the technological advances, but the internet does allow people to connect with others all over the world, despite the pursuit of relationships or not. In any case, our society is all too focused on defining love, not on loving. |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
welll who ever reads this .,,umm im not going to be posting much ,,,because im going to dc my internet for a bit....just feel free to read my poems if u like and hopefully i will see u all soon ..when i am ready ...im just going throguh alot like i said and im trying to calm things downn for myself soo ,,,hopefully like when i put it back on i will start to post again ,,i might stay posting for a few dayz if i dont change my mind ,,,well thanks anywayz for ur lovely replies...and take care ....lovezz peace A Friend's love says: |
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Rommance_Touch Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 97 |
Hi...Sweet...Why we kill a love if we feel it...why we kill admire if we its beside...why not develope our feelings if we feel relax with this person...whatever yr background...its the sweetness of the love to be unexpected...to feel it while u wasnt care at the time to have it, but suddenly u felt...why not develope this relation and move it from a machines to a real life...and contact him, meet him, treat him...maybe it will more relax...Whatever yr dont kill a feel, a feel is a human body...without its a nothing...Dont Kill It... Beside i sumbited a poet under the name Unexpected Love...u replied and said u liked it...i think thats yr opinion...but there a pressure behind u....but u feel it, u like it |
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Fleur Member
since 2004-04-09
Posts 103 |
I'm going through the same right now, sis. I've seen this guy, and I truely love him. - I loved your poem. Excellent write!! |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
hey.. lolol....you know we are muslims ,fluer i think u know what i mean,,but some people dont get it...i dont want to hurt anyone but he's is coming on to me ,i dont want that ...i dont want my family upset and especially GOD.so i dont know...well thank u all.. lovezz and respect A Friend's love says: |
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Don_Juan Member
since 2004-04-08
Posts 252Far from where I am going |
interesting topic and a good write nice use of muffin |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
oh thanks ,,,well im going to dc my internet now so dont ask me why but hopfully soon i will be posting again... bye all and take care.. peace and lovez A Friend's love says: |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
and hopefully i will be posting in june ,end of june after school finishes ..so see u all soon and take care once again.. love and respect A Friend's love says: |
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Fleur Member
since 2004-04-09
Posts 103 |
Are you leaving us, sis? Because of him? Don't do that. You can't escape from love... Don't hide it.. |
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Rommance_Touch Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 97 |
ITs A Run Of Love....We Are So Weak To Face It... I Love Yea |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
I know this is kinda a late reply but I liked the poem but I don't agree with what it's message is. I believe(and this is just me) that love will find a way, if it's through the internet or not. Alot of people think online love won't work cause they arn't there and I disagree cause relationships are great if they are based on more than just physical attraction. Sorry, it's still a good poem! lol "If ever you think of me out of the blue, just remember it's all the kisses I've blown in the air finally catching up with you!" |
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Michelle_loves_Mike![]() ![]()
since 2003-12-20
Posts 1189Pennsylvania |
Mike is the center of my universe, I love him beyond words, and he loves me deeply in return, it is real,,,,and, FYI, we met online...... Michelle I wish all could find the true happiness I have found,,in the eyes of Mike |
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Defective Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 73Salisbury NC |
I met my boyfriend online 6 years ago and I am moving to Kansas to be with him next week. We have met several times and he is the best thing that has ever happened to me. I totally disagree with this poem. |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
lolol ....welll i guess im the only 1....i just cant get it in my head no matter what.,..love and respect peace I hate the world because it does'nt have a taste, i HATE the world because it does'nt have a color.!! |
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SwEeTnSeXy18 Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 247nc |
Sweet: Hey! I agree with you. I tried online dating and it seemed good at first but then he cheated on me so thats over! However MANY people are all about internet love. My sister is thats for sure. Take care! Lisa ~in order to gain, you have to lose~ |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
thank god i have someone who agrees with me,,lololz,,im soo proud lol...thanks sis loveszzz I hate the world because it does'nt have a taste, i HATE the world because it does'nt have a color.!! |
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zenny Member
since 2002-11-24
Posts 371Belgium |
You knowm cursed by 'online'... I met my ex online.. we met in real life after a while and fell in love, had a wonderfull time together too! My current bf i also met online, met again in reallife and all over again we're a couple now! Just to say: it's possible to meet your love online. But: be carefull out there ![]() ![]() |
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TigerZ Member
since 2002-01-02
Posts 83Ontario, Canada |
Love is wherever you want to find it. It has no wrong or right. It just is. As someone said above, the internet and phone is perhaps the only way to have a great relationship with that other person because you don't have to worry about physical attraction. Physical attraction and the emphasis placed on it these days can completely ruin a perfectly nice and natural relationship. Not only that, but you can be yourself. Just you. Not the modified or filtered version of yourself. Not the mask you wear when you go out into society to give them the personality that they demand from every person. Just you. And almost every person wears a mask when they step outside their bedroom door. You (refering to everyone who might have denied it) can't step into society and not wear a mask because they won't accept you. You will be rejected. And honestly, who can say that they aren't at their happiest when they are with a person who knows them fully for who they are, without the mask and without the filters. It is truly a pity that we can't be who we are for fear of rejection. Everyone and everything will be so much better that way. However. It was a pretty good poem. Definitely one side of an issue/idea, whatever you want to call it. I can't think of the word now. Thanks for posting it. A life without loveā¦is no life at all. |
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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land |
About the poem, here comes to being brutally honest. use less "I"'s in your pieces for one, there are other ways. it's a simple way to make the poem more readable and appear less angsty as well. and well, stop writing poems "on the spot", bring us finished products, tools to think with. remember wilde "all bad poetry springs from genuine feelings". Its mostly bollocks, a lot of great stuff comes from genuine feelings, but you must learn to take a step back, objectify. otherwise, it's as if you were emtying your handbag on us. we may like the person emptying the handbag, but hell, it's only their handbag ![]() |
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drummerboy678 Member
since 2003-10-28
Posts 134 |
I'd have to agree here... However I've said that many times, and poems like this are still posted... lots of them. Anyways, keep writing, just maybe a little less posting, unless your willing to put some work into them. |
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