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Your Life Saving Touch
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Your Life Saving Touch |
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Snickers123 Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 94United States-Iowa |
I wrote this for my bf...let me know what you think  Your Life Saving Touch ~By Leah Heick Just when things were getting bad Pain and sorrow filled my head All it took was a call from you, You took my hand And pulled me through You have done everything you possibly can Lifting my sprits with a lot of love And a helping hand. You’ve gotten me through another day And for that brief moment My pain goes away. It returns all too quickly My friends turned on me It hurts so much. One simple comment Will break my heart My so called friends Have torn me apart My world is gone I have nowhere to turn I entered a dark hole Where no candle can burn This pain is so strong My confidence so weak I curl up in a corner Praying for the pain to clear But it’s only growing worse There’s nothing I can do All it takes is a simple phone call From you… I don’t want to be on this earth For another day All I ask Is for the pain to go away It lingers around every corner And lurks behind each door I am trapped now There’s nowhere to turn You tap my shoulder I fall into your loving arms And I know right then That I am in no harm I’m too far From devils reach You hold me now So close to your heart The pain is within me Only your eyes can see I hear your soft voice So calm and relaxed The tension and pain Builds in me I hate it so much And the pain comes and goes I’ve waited so long For your loving touch You take my hand And pull me through I love you John, I thank God that I’ve met you. |
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Stepharoo Member
since 2004-05-04
Posts 149Washington, USA |
Wow this was so awesome!!! I love it...Its so sweet! Great Job! |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Snickers123-- Heh, you have the same first name as me. Anyway, I'm not going to critique this, especially if it is of sentimental value. However, I think your boyfriend will be thoroughly touched not only by your act in writing this, but also from what you had to say. I'm sure he'll appreciate the fact that you appreciate him. I know I would if I was in his shoes.--Leah |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
This poem is so sweet and beautiful. GREAT job!!! |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
this one was reallly sweet good ,even gr888...keep writting peaceeee |
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Rommance_Touch Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 97 |
Really its out of descripation....no words will give this poem its right...what i have to say...keep write..lets enjoy more mix of love and feelings...we need that...BRAVO...Keep Going  |
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a123 Member
since 2004-03-27
Posts 72 |
hey welcome to passions.. nice poem!keep writting... love a123 |
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Fleur Member
since 2004-04-09
Posts 103 |
First of all welcome to passions (you're new, I think ). Your poem was so sweet... I don't know how to describe it, it's beautiful. Take Care.-Fleur- |
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