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dont you dare!!!!!!!11
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dont you dare!!!!!!!11 |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
dont you dare to tell me what you want me to do. dont you dare to say that you love me or have respect for me.. you dont care about my eduction ,so why should i bother? no matter how much i speak ,no matter how much i cry ,its no difference... i made miistakes and i agree but im still learning, dont i desreve any othe chance? i want to live and feel like i can depend on myself,but if your planning on getting me back to a place i dont want to be ,, i have no respect for you, i wish running away would help ,but it wont how about killing myself? would that help? i feel soo afraid of becoming an adult , i feel so afraid of moving on.. can i stay here? can i stay who i am forever? i dont want to move ,i cant im too afraid i will loose. iam too afraid i will never be me again.. i cant go back and fix my mistakes.. can i? would i? how can i?.. im gone in a dream that will never end.. a dream full of darkness that never learns to dance.... dont you dare to force me.!!!!! dont you dare to say i have to leave!!!!!!!!! dont you dare to you control my life,.. just because im under the roof it des'nt mean you can control what i have.. who can i talk to face to face ? and help me go on and make me feel soo much not in pain??? can it be my big brother who i love so much but i messed my full head with?? or can i just talk to the mirror that might help... so dont dare to make me do things i dont want to do !!!!!!!!!!!!11111111 |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
i actually wrote this now,,im feelings soo not me ...i feel like im being forced but what can i do?? please try to understand this poem carefully.. ---------- hope you like it!! |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Are you looking for advice? Or comments on your poem? |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Well I can't give you advice, it's not very realistic for me to try and tell you how to try and make things better when I'm in nearly the same situation myself. But it was a very emotional piece and I liked it. It takes a minute to really understand how you feel but the fact that it makes me think is what I like about it. Whatever you do just remember there is always a way out of everything, it may just take time to find. I hope to see more of you work, and good luck. -"Poet Nascitar, Non Fit" |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
HMm...your poetry sounds so angry to me. Even your ones regarding love. I haven't been around here in ages so obviously I don't know a thing about you. But I'm giong to make an assumption that you're pretty young? Sounds like you're going through the akwardness that every teenager goes through. You aren't ready to let go of your childhood, but you're being thrown into the adultworld. We've all been there, and it will get better, i promise.  **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
lololol...well actaully i am a young poet,,,,ummm going throguh alot believe me but thank u soo much for ur reply thanks u sooooooo much ... |
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