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Obscurity or glory, decisions decisions...
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Obscurity or glory, decisions decisions... |
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Paragon Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 114 |
Erratic words spill from your lips like water babbling through creekbeds. sardonic stares consume your bravery, and again you sit humbled by fear. The details are anarchic, lacking reason and yet complex like a tightly woven bird's nest. It rests just inside your corroded mind's eye striving for the highest mark; understanding. Solutions are often more problematic than indecision. Complex answers lack potency to absolve, and usually begin to muddy already murky waters. Complicated questions require simple answers... This is the mecca, ultimately the end of this journey whether in flames and ash or roses and love. This began with you and it will end with you; the answer is a challenge: "Will you ask her to dance?" |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Paragon, You did this so very well. Captured emotions with vivid descriptions and delivered the crux of the matter succinctly. Brought back some strong feelings and memories. Well done!  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
good job. i liked this. it's similar to my writing not so long ago. the only thing is that it gets a bit wordy at times and obscures the ability to understand clearly |
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