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young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2004-04-22 02:51 PM

Bright Eyes

I have seen lips pressed against lies,
Ah! The beauty prolonged in rose-colored kiss.
How I miss the ignorance in all of that bliss.

I have wished for the white-blues of the sun
To shine in my eyes when the laughter has died,
But awkward silence reprimands what was tried.

I have whispered to myself the broken truths
When inspiration raises voices that float to my ears,
They roll off your tongue like unprovoked funeral tears.

I have prayed again to God for a change tonight,
A rescue from the torrent of lies that wash over the stars.
Please distance yourself and speak those wretched words from afar.

Your bright eyes still stare down lifeless into mine
Come home...

peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2004-04-22 04:38 PM

Great work, this poem was really good! ~Jess

"Hopeless romantics are only hopeless in the eyes of those who don't believe in romance." -Unknown

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2004-04-22 06:10 PM

An absolutly wonderful poem!

~Alli~

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2004-04-23 01:22 PM

thanks alot for the comments. i'd really like to hear what more people think.

Censored
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since 2004-04-11

Posts 86

4 posted 2004-04-25 11:16 PM

Loved it.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

5 posted 2004-04-26 03:31 PM

thank you

sweet_cute_palestinian04
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since 2004-04-11

Posts 418
Earth

6 posted 2004-04-27 01:08 AM

wowwwwwwwwwwwww..nicee poemm i loved it keep it upp..

*Belabebeautiful*

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since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

7 posted 2004-04-27 02:10 AM

another beautiful write from you! For some reason the third stanza, the last line was a bit akward for me, but that is probably just me...but the imagery...breathtaking? very vivid write.
~Live and Laugh~

The nice thing about being a pesimest is that your either right, or pleasantly surprised.
~Bella~

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

8 posted 2004-04-27 12:44 PM

ya, the line was a little awkward. thanks for pointing that out. thanks for commenting

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