Teen Poetry #7 |
Crimson Butterfly |
young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
heres a new song. Crimson Butterfly Say goodnight, not goodbye I will see you again, I will see you again! Another night without you I will see you again, I miss you again! Crimson butterflies on this postcard Fly away into the lonely air. "Aloha", a hello from nowhere, Reminding me of whispered greetings. And i miss you, and I'll wish for you... Say goodnight, not goodbye I will see you again, I will see you again! Another night without you I will see you again, I miss you again! A buttefly kiss shimmers in your letter And i long for more to read. I can still feel you rise and breathe Though your breath has been gone for days. Say goodnight, not goodbye I will see you again, I will see you again! Another night without you I will see you again, I miss you again! goodbye... |
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TheGirlNoOneKnew Member
since 2003-12-04
Posts 92PA, USA |
Oh, this was lovely. I especially loved the lines: A buttefly kiss shimmers in your letter And i long for more to read. I can still feel you rise and breathe Though your breath has been gone for days. Beautiful. |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
this poem is just..well..wow it's grate...keep writing when you live you begin to die |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
This was awesome. This was my favorite part - "Crimson butterflies on this postcard Fly away into the lonely air. "Aloha", a hello from nowhere, Reminding me of whispered greetings." Awesome job. "I...I bleed...For no one..but myself...For me and no one else!"~ MudVaYne |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Alex~ This is just a lovely song ... and the title certainly captured my eye~ *Huglets*:hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thank you all so much. my band will turn this into a nice acoustic song for sure. maybe i'll do it solo. who knows? |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Very, very nice! ~Alli~ |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Nice.... I would love to hear it. WOW! I can jsut imagine.... VERY AMZING write!! I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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Ixxi Member
since 2004-01-02
Posts 77England |
This is beautiful. You never ruin a piece of writing. I am (slightly!) envious of, but EXTREMELY grateful for, such talent. "Where paper cuts, and bloody hands, In the middle, they will meet" |
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