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River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

0 posted 2003-10-14 07:37 PM

In my dreams
i see
fog before
a nightmare wake
evil corruption
seeps into living

in my dreams
i hear
voices
millions
screaming
haunting
pleading
for me
to join them
in hell

in my dreams
i feel
cold
black
disconnected
void
of this bitter reality
that only exists in my mind

in my dreams
i know
Satan dwells there
linger in the shadows
till my eyes are heavy
then creep
into my everlasting sleep
to torment and taunt

"are you from God or Satan?"
replies the wicked demon:
"I am born of Elijah"
does that make sense?
of coarse not
dreams are nothing
but confusion
"away from me you wicked spirit!
...In the name of Jesus Christ!"

silence
wake
eyes wide open
in my sleep

in my dreams
i fear
the bitter reality
of dark and light
does not always apear
as it really is
you may see a light
but hear a demon
you may help just a homeless man
but entertain an angel unaware
you never know
what is what
only God can tell
the bad boys from the good
the good dreams from the bad

in my dreams
i hold
the power to see
to hear
to feel
to know
to fear
what wake does not allow
i will someday find
my way out of the creeping shadow
in my dreams

A river of change is rushing over me, through me. Forfeit to the waters, forget the past, live in the present.

CrEaTuRe
Member

since 2000-01-01

Posts 260
Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia

1 posted 2003-10-16 01:19 AM

It's a good read and like the flow....

Love CoMeS To ThOsE WhO Still HoPe AlThOuGh They've BeeN DiSaPpOiNteD,To ThOsE WhO StiLL BeLiEvE AlThOuGh ThEy'Ve BeeN BeTraYeD,LoVe KeEpS ThEm GoInG

swow finix
Junior Member

since 2003-10-17

Posts 14
here but nowhere now

2 posted 2003-10-17 07:44 AM

river, i truely liked your poem although alot of it was lost with me, (fault of my own, see i do not believe in god) but still i felt the passion in which you do, (always nice to have something to belive in, isn't it?) i love the flow of your poem and the way is speeds up in important parts.
~
swow finix

~be who you want- believe what you want~
~love who you want~

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

3 posted 2003-10-17 06:34 PM

CrEaTuRe: thank you =).

snow finix: thank you also...lol actually it could be a good thing that it didn't all make sense...whether or not you believe in God, this poem was meant to be sortove confusing just like dreams. dreams never ever make sense because your mind just floats around in a nuetral thought process. i wrote this when i was really sleepy, coincidently. =)

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

Asian Rain
Member

since 2003-10-11

Posts 73

4 posted 2003-10-17 11:42 PM

How well you've captured the mysterious nature of dreams in your poem.

Asia

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

5 posted 2003-10-18 12:33 PM

=) thank you =)

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

*Inque Monroe*
Junior Member

since 2003-10-18

Posts 43
No where special

6 posted 2003-10-18 10:02 PM

This poem flows alot and i think its a wonderful poem, its dark and gives a eerie feeling. ^^

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

7 posted 2003-10-19 12:28 PM

Inque Monroe: thank you, i'm glad it's eerie to you, i like that, lol. welcome to piptalk! =)

- River

Love hurts as bad as it feels good.

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