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Just some ramblings.........
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Just some ramblings......... |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand 
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Hi... this isnt really a poem. Kinda just me rambling with all this stuff im just writing down... if there are any paragraphs you think might make a good poem starter, please tell. I'm kinda lost for inspiration at the moment. (lol) anyways heres basically some words put together to make irrelevant sentences... Dont look at me like im worthless Dont make me hide Dont make me understand your patience I won't lie to the fact that your ungracious attempts are being ripped at the seems to make me look at you like your perfect cause we all know you are not your magnified obscurity makes me laugh your insane abnormality makes me laugh your absolute attention makes me laugh your explicit mindless notions make me laugh but that look on your face makes me just want to curl up and die save me from your eyes been lost inside too many times to feel safe again in your arms cause i know just one look up and they are there reeling me in like a fish on a rod and i got no way to stop them please save me from you eyes and let me drown some other way so that the water will still surround me but i will be alone in the fact that you will no longer be watching over me all the time OMG RAMBLE! lol random i no i no but im bored! and slightly inspired! LOR "It would make those who listen to it doze into a land of rivers, kund fu and unicorns, eventually making the listener pee in his/her pants - Brandon |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Omg! I loved it soooo much, sometimes rambling words work better than you think, and it was layed out like a poem. "save me from your eyes been lost inside too many times to feel safe again in your arms cause i know just one look up and they are there reeling me in like a fish on a rod and i got no way to stop them please save me from you eyes and let me drown some other way so that the water will still surround me but i will be alone in the fact that you will no longer be watching over me all the time" The absolute best part, I loved this part the most, the other paragraphs weren't as good I don't think. But please, show me more of this. Hollow. "Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian |
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Mad_Hatter Member
since 2003-06-29
Posts 393Canada |
I agree, ramblings can end up as amazing works, because it's just pure raw emotion, which is what this was. Nice stuff. |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
hey if you want some advice...keep rambling, no matter how silly it sounds, that's how I come up with a lot of my stuff...don't think just write down whatever comes...just get loose, you know? by the way, this is not bad for a ramble  keep it up.- River Running out of pain |
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