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Barren Cry |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
Barren cyr was written as a song but can also be poetry so thats why im putting it up. this song, idea, cry has been in me for a while. but it took the love and help of a couple of my friends for me to get to a place where i could put it on paper and share it with you. so here it is. --------------------------------------------------- Barren Cry Looking around What did I see No one standing next to me How could I fight How could I care When no one was even there Why me How could this be Whats gonna happen to me now Where will I go What will I be Can I make it all alone The world left me alone No one seemed to understand Why was I there When I couldn't even care Why me How could this be Whats gonna happen to me now Where will I go What will I be Can I make it all alone All alone in the dark A child was crying Fighting to stay alive Batteling demons deep inside Crying to the sky: Why me How could this be Whats gonna happen to me now Where will I go What will I be Can I make it all alone No one seems to understand What it's like to be This Barren Land This Barren Cry This is all inside of me Why me How could this be Whats gonna happen to me now Where will I go What will I be Can I make it all alone Can you hear The Barren Cry Of a girl Who wants to ... Someone standing next to me Listen, look, and love This is all I'm asking "this life i live gets harder and harder. but every time i try to fix i end up on the floor. is this how im supposed to be. alone yet unafraid to hurt |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Oh wow. I really loved this. And your writing doesnt suck. At all. I dont think so anyways, and anyone who does, is crazy.  Poetry is about writing what you feel, and thats exactly what you did. Kissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Spiritrider, that was absolutely heartfelt and deep. I wish to read more of your poetry and to hear more of your music in my head. Thank you very much for being so open. yv |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
thanks you guys. that really means alot to me. i guess my writing is better than i thought. luv ya all. "this life i live gets harder and harder. but every time i try to fix i end up on the floor. is this how im supposed to be. alone yet unafraid to hurt |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
your writing is very good. keep writing it out. let your emotions flow. it can help you with all your questions. most of all believe in yourself. i know it helps if you have others to believe in you and from what ive seen here you have that. my heart goes out to you my soul embraces yours my spirits wings wipe away your tears n fears in hope that you fly free the way you are meant to be |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
thanks I am not alive. Just a shell mearly moving with what is left of a ghost. An echo I am whats left after the true thing has left. |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Oh my dear Darling... How touching...I don't know what else to say...I know my previous statement was a bit on the cornier side...but what can I say...your work leaves me speechless...when I even know what I want to say! Just know that this piece is lovely and deeply touhces me...truly. Yv~Now singing the graces of others' lips.... |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
it is awsome you really should write more a day. even though i dont post i still read. this flows well. wonderful write xoxo |
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brother stone Junior Member
since 2006-01-25
Posts 28 |
that is how i cry and how i feel most of the time. |
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xFromtheHeartx Member
since 2005-09-24
Posts 80Florida U.S. |
very good. i enjoyed reading this. do you play in a band? i think it would make a good song. thanks for sharring Darkness fallows the currupted Martyr... |
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cody 2 Junior Member
since 2006-03-12
Posts 48london |
i thought this great |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Awesome write. ~Alli~ |
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