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Broken Fairy Tale |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
This poem is kinda weird with the line breaks not being where they normally would be, but I was going for something different. I hope you enjoy it, and thanks for taking the time to read it. Broken Fairy Tale Old wounds, that for so long I bathed in salt, holding on To memories of the past, until I was A cracked shell of my former self, so different From how I used to be, not reaching For the stars, but holding on To the life I thought I knew, trusting in what Can't be trusted, but I believed with All my heart and soul, till the very bitter end To our much too short love story, there's no Happily ever after, only The End. Everything gets better in the end, and if it's not better, it's not the end. |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
Good poem, great last line. The line breaks seemed to disrupt the flow for me, what do you think? Thanks for sharing. Keep writing. |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
Like I said, I was trying to go for something different. I wasn't sure if I really liked it or not. I don't know, but thank you for replying. Jen Everything gets better in the end, and if it's not better, it's not the end. |
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KuruShio Member
since 2003-11-18
Posts 110 |
i like it, the line breaks being in odd locations make you pay more attention to what your reading as opposed to skimming over it as you might tend to do. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Loved it. The line breaks were odd, but who said odd is bad! I enjoyed this peice so much. It's funny how a lot of my fairy tales end the same way! **hugs** Kissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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