Dark Poetry #4 |
Trust |
Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
I wanted to be with you, To hold you, And kiss you, When you are not around, I wanted to miss you, And please you, I wanted to give you, Rings, and cards, Bunnies, and roses, But instead I gave you, My trust, I was afraid to share it, To give you a part of mine, For many have used me, In their life, Once again I thought, I give someone a chance, No two people are alike, Just like no two snowflakes, But was I wrong? To give my trust, All of it- In a short time, Your lies are not big, But they mock me, A fool I am made today, No tears can show, No apologies can mend, No anger can shun, The pain I feel inside, Here I am Once again alone, Learning the lesson I should have learned, I can only trust one to be true, To be honest with me, And you have shown, That its is not you... |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
I liked it, but I thought it got better as it went along. It was stronger at the end. Hollow. "Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian |
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aussie teen Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 396Australia |
this is amazing i know the feeling of only being able to trust in one person... believe me it is a lonely place. your ability of using imagery in your writing is overwhelming. you have amazing talent and cant wait to see more of your work. keep it up Mel |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
this is amazing ,teriffic..i truly loved it with all my heart and understood what you were saying keep posting please....i love ur poemssssssssss |
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