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Mental skip
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Mental skip |
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Paragon Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 114 |
this unrelenting mental cry like a scratched cd skipping continually I can't stop the sound of your voice I can't drown out the noise repeating over and over in my mind and again I can't dull the noise Close my eyes, try to block the tears all your shattered lies revealed can't block the images from coming all the effort spent, all the love given all the wasted youthful years sorrow and death loom overhead like a black starless sky without hope I can taste the coppery tang of crimson streams a bitter omen impaling all of my dreams I once had for continuity for you and I the regret streaming down my cheeks burns with an acrid scent like acid I have no desire to continue this this rhythmic breath, this pulsing blood this life I lead, not without us not without you... |
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Mt Rowley Junior Member
since 2004-01-06
Posts 25United Kingdom |
relative, liked it a lot. Im new to poetry if you liked it please tell me what you think of my other stuff |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Nice Write "Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian |
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toxic_outroar New Member
since 2004-03-22
Posts 6 |
Many can relate to the feeling, i sure know i can. |
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armanca Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 211Tennessee |
" can taste the coppery tang of crimson streams a bitter omen impaling all of my dreams" I like this part. Great piece. I have been gone from these forums for awhile now. I came back looking around, and I found yours to be one of the only ones I read so far that spoke to me. Thank you. |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
ooh I like this, it has rythm and rhyme...and it's also very sad. my kind of write, very nice, good job! =) - River sleep my precious slumber |
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