Dark Poetry #4 |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
Everything is insisting upon being pink. Spring fever... My eyes are twiching behind their lids. Truth is eating through my lies like acid. My bruises were so easy to conceal in the winter months. Under my little grey cloud. But now, now I closed my eyes as I looked your way. And my heart fell clumsily out of place. Everything is overly bright. Your gentle fingers brushed my ribs, as you put my words back in check my heart back to sleep. This is the same ritual we have grown to know too well. Time and time again. And the numbers on the clock are so tired of the montony. A wearing red glow, and we all know. Its a biting honesty. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
Wow. This poem was beautiful. The imagery was awesome. I loved it! I'm savin this, if its okay with you anyways! ~Vapire Kisses I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
I really really really liked this! i've added it to my library because i really thought it was awesome and so descriptive. I liked the last three lines the best. "Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
hey Chica, this was groovy! the imagery in this is ...whispery and dreamy, i really like that. good job =) catcha later, - River sleep my precious slumber |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
this one was interesting to me, i dont know if i am supposed to feel sad because it seems there is a lot of hurt in here or happy because you are comming out about the pain you have suffered and sharing it with the world, anyways nice write "So what befalls the flawless? |
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click1 Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 152usa |
Ugh! like a stone,a hard stone, in my stomach! I felt the power in this one! Good job!! And what Eor said...sad words and courage all at once. Thank you. Click |
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