Dark Poetry #4 |
Scratches on Your Back and Marks on Your Neck |
Defective Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 73Salisbury NC |
I was never really able to understand the complexities of this "relationship" until now as you lay there snoring beside me bent over in your pseudo-fetal position and I realize I don't even trust you as you pretend to sleep. But I'll go on my intuition and let you be I'll speak my peace while you can't hear me. Tonight I'll say what needs to be said but it'll all be forgotten in the morning. "I prayed for the very last time tonight, before we laid here in the usual silence after our occasional bouts of bad sex for this to be over soon, for one of us to finally said it aloud but I'm scared that you'll agree and I'm afraid to be alone. Baby, I can't breathe tonight please save me. Or you could just lay there... and let me fight this battle by myself, like I always seem to do but you always take the credit when the war is won and over. I'm sorry if I seem just a little tense but I doubt if you'd recognize my face right now when the mascara stains are all washed away it's hard to see the other side of the cosmetic rainbow and I promise there's a pot of gold somewhere else in this life but it's no longer here. Maybe when you wake up and stare as I sleep you'll feel the same way but please do as I did and not say a word to my waking I've come to this realization but I'll never tell you to your face because I'm just... Don't leave me alone." This will probably not make sense to anyone else... but I liked some of the lines, so here it is. |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
It makes sense to me. In face, I really like it. I don't really know if I can explain why... Maybe because you captured the moment and the mind so perfectly. "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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click1 Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 152usa |
I like it..the emotions roll on the words like waves on the ocean! eb and flow like the tide. Well done! I can see.... Thanx! Click |
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green_itchy_stuff Senior Member
since 2003-06-26
Posts 1929New Caney, Tx |
I think its good. Everything that runs through your head is placed to explain exactly what your talking about. It looks like a broken mirror and sounds like a daytime soap. Would make a nice song too. GIS [I appreciate your concern, you'll always stink and burn.]-Kurt Cobain |
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